Monday, April 18, 2011

Submission Becky

Name: Becky Regalado


Title & Genre: EYES OF STONE - Fantasy

Pitch: To save her family from monsters, she may have to become one.

1st 250 words: Anaiiya had approached the Tower many times—always prior to sunset, while the beasts still slept. To venture near the monolith at night was dangerous and foolish. Some might call it suicidal. But if she wanted the gargoyles to chase her, she needed to get their attention…and the only way to do that was to make them feel threatened. A dangerous idea; an insane idea.

Well, who would miss her if the worst should happen? Penniless vagabonds were mourned by no one.

The gravel in the courtyard skittered before her mincing steps as she approached the door to the Tower. She bit her bottom lip and wrung the sacks in her hands. Sweat trickled down the back of her neck as she watched the balcony three hundred feet above. No challenge came. No sound but the wind blowing in her ears. It looked like she’d have to do this the hard way. She swallowed and hurried onto the ancient stone steps.

Anaiiya reached out and touched the door with one hand, surprised at how smooth the petrified wood veneer felt under her ragged fingertips. The door was actually eight inches thick and cast from solid iron; like so many things about this place, the door’s rotted appearance was little more than an illusion to keep the occasional curiosity-seeker at bay.

As she lingered there, a vision flashed through her mind of a monster pressed against the door, watching her with shining teeth and barely-contained rage.


  1. This is a beautiful piece - the writer's mastery of elegant language really shows. The author has a SUPERB fantasy voice - descriptive and lyrical without being suffocating or heavy as so many lyrical voices are. It's wonderful and refreshing.

    It also leaves me wanting much, much more. Good luck!

  2. I really like this. It makes me want more. I cant find anything that might need tweaking. Good job!