Sunday, September 18, 2011

A.E. Martin --post 7

Title: Ravenous Dusk
Genre: Adult Urban Fantasy
Set up: Neither of them want to give in to their feelings, for different reasons: Kieran to protect her (MC: Blake), from something she doesn’t yet know about him, and Blake because she’s supposed to hate Kieran because of something he’d done to her. This is the first time they get close.

“You’re trembling,” Kieran said.

“Am I?” I asked. I hadn’t noticed. He moved closer then, and drew me into his arms.

“I’m sorry for the things you have to see,” he whispered. His breath tickled against my neck, and it made my body ache with something I tried to fight against. Despite myself, I found myself turning into the crook of his neck, lightly breathing in the scent of him. Could smell be described as dark? Because that was how Kieran smelled, deliciously dark. He pulled back slowly, his cheek brushing against mine as he did so.

“I would spare you from my world if I could,” he said. Damn it, he was too close, because I was barely hearing what he was saying, all I could think about was giving him permission to do whatever he wanted that involved those soft looking lips and my body. Kieran brought his hand up to cup my cheek, lightly brushing his thumb over my bottom lip, which he was staring at.

“I wish I could,” he said softly. Since he was touching my lip and staring at it, I was sure I knew what he was talking about.

“Why don’t you?” I found myself asking. I’d slap myself for that later. His eyes were back on mine, and I felt paralyzed. The air felt like it was getting thicker, and warmer. I myself felt burning hot, and it was all I could do to stop my hands from tugging up his shirt.


  1. Nice. Love the way I could feel the tension in the scene. Does he or doesn't he? It kept me reading. Well done!

  2. I thought this was a great blend of her internal thoughts with the events going on around her. I liked how it slowly built up to the point where she can't resist anymore and is tugging his shirt up. I didn't even have to read the setup to get sucked into this.

  3. You got me with the last line. Very hot.