tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8526683900253948041.post7025496876800602358..comments2024-03-27T02:20:51.751-05:00Comments on J.L. Spelbring: Submission MarieAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07804306924674002487noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8526683900253948041.post-59807912828049052512015-12-22T00:47:38.704-06:002015-12-22T00:47:38.704-06:00I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this...I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this, because in this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/tDCsvf" rel="nofollow">Makanan Sehat Penderita Diabetes Yang Enak </a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/HuN2AJ" rel="nofollow">Manfaat Pemberian Asi Eksklusif Bagi Ibu Dan Anak</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/XHST1p" rel="nofollow">Nasi Putih Bagi Penderita Diabetes</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/gepnIg" rel="nofollow">Informasi Tentang Makanan Penurun Kolesterol Jahat</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/IFpNYl" rel="nofollow">Hilangkan Flek Hitam Di Wajah Dengan Peeling</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/iCn7pZ" rel="nofollow">Atasi Kaki Bengkak Setelah Melahirkan</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/bAkbR9" rel="nofollow">Ramuan Tradisional Untuk Menghilangkan Wasir</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/KFGsaS" rel="nofollow">Cara Membuat Kulit Wajah Putih Bersih Dan Halus</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/EeqGfo" rel="nofollow">Tumbuhan Yang Dapat Dijadikan Obat Herbal</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/yTaiPW" rel="nofollow">Buah Buahan Yang Mengandung Banyak Antioksidan</a> <br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04723201723175985290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8526683900253948041.post-37685087742620181052011-04-25T15:31:28.256-05:002011-04-25T15:31:28.256-05:00The pitch confused me at first, and I think it'...The pitch confused me at first, and I think it's because you didn't capitalize Death. I kept wondering who wanted Kat's soul, then I realized it was the Grim Reaper. <br /><br />In terms of the opening, watch the tone. This comes off as too sarcastic and negative to me. Also, the cliches are over the top. We should be able to relate to Kat and right now, I don't. <br /><br />This can all be fixed though. Good luck!Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11886151771194369513noreply@blogger.com